Ren 77 Posted August 24, 2002 Share Posted August 24, 2002 OK all you budding songwriters!!!!Some of you may remember my second graders are performing Somewhere in My Mem'ry for their Christmas concert. I am planning on having a slide show to go along with the song. Slides will be Christmas baby pictures of the kids in the concert. Or holiday pics or whatever.K - here's what I need help on. I need to extend the song. I need more verses. I don't know which verses to extend. I personally feel like I don't want to sing the precious moments (into the last section) more than once but I don't want the song to be boring. I basically need to double the time of the song. I want to keep the same feeling going with the song. I don't want to put TOO much stuff about Christmas but what ever's good.Candles in the window, Shadows painting the ceiling.Gazing at the fire glow,Feeling that gingerbread feeling.Stockings o?er the fireplace.Presents under the tree.??????????Precious moments,Special people,Happy facesI can see.Somewhere in my mem?ry.Christmas joys all around me.Living in my mem?ry,All of the music,All of the magic,All of the family home here with me.So what I'm looking for from you is, help with extending the song with nice lyrics that are kid friendly. No big words. Can anyone help? If I like your stuff I'll put your name in the program! (if you want) LOL Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted August 24, 2002 Author Share Posted August 24, 2002 K, I think if we can change the words of the last part I can be OK with singing it two times. It's the last words that I only want to sing once.Any luck? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted August 24, 2002 Author Share Posted August 24, 2002 P. S. you don't have to come up with a whole verse. A line or even rhyming words will do!!!!!Let those creative juices flow! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Big John 3 Posted August 24, 2002 Share Posted August 24, 2002 I have absolutely no idea what this song is.BigJohnCreative Desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trumpeteer 302 Posted August 24, 2002 Share Posted August 24, 2002 I'm trying Ren! But I'm no Leslie Bricusse. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted August 25, 2002 Author Share Posted August 25, 2002 it's ok. any inspiration will do. It's from Home Alone, Big John. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ray Barnsbury 8 Posted August 25, 2002 Share Posted August 25, 2002 Stockings o?er the fireplace.Presents under the tree.??????????Paper, ribbon, and laceShimmering, glittering, sparklingI know it doesn't exactly rhyme, but it could be good enough.Good luck!Ray Barnsbury Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King Mark 3,631 Posted August 25, 2002 Share Posted August 25, 2002 P. S. you don't have to come up with a whole verse. A line or even rhyming words will do!!!!!Let those creative juices flow!Boy,you just broke a message board rule big time.K.M. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted August 25, 2002 Author Share Posted August 25, 2002 um, i don't think I'm the first one to do that. P.S. they aren't in all caps AND my whole message wasn't like it. So let's stick to the topic here.Ray I LIKE IT! I'll see if I can come up with some more. Anyone else? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PetePan 163 Posted August 26, 2002 Share Posted August 26, 2002 Ren,I find it rather difficult to think about Christmas rhymes, when I'm sitting in my shorts, drinking a beer and it's 25 degrees outside.I will think about it.PetePan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dalboz 0 Posted August 26, 2002 Share Posted August 26, 2002 Ren,after much listening to the Home Alone soundtrack over and over and over ... LOL ... here's what I came up with:(I)Candles in the window,Shadows painting the ceiling.Gazing at the fire glow,Feeling that gingerbread feeling.Stockings o'er the fireplace,Orn'ments lining the tree.Soft snow tickling my face,Moments preserved in my mem'ry.Tender gazes.Warmth and comfort.Loved ones smilingback at me.Somewhere in my mem'ry,Lies the joy of Christmas.Living in my mem'ry,All of the musicAll of the magicAll of the fam'ly,home, here with me.(II)Sleigh bells jingle laz'ly,Friends and fam'ly together.Windows frosted haz'ly,Magical, crisp winter weather.Wreaths hung on the front door,Sitting on grandpa's knee.Stories, legends, and lore.Told to me, now in my mem'ry.Precious moments.Special people.Happy faces,I can see.Somewhere in my mem'ry,Christmas joys all around me.Living in my mem'ry,All of the musicAll of the magicAll of the fam'ly,home, here with me.A few notes:- Since it's the main point of the song, I felt it important to use mem'ry at the end of each second stanza. Also, it's a convienient, useful rhyme. - And also I felt it important, even though you said not to, to use the "Somewhere in . . . all of the family" stanza twice. Since it's the main emotional grabber, I thought that by using it twice, the "audience" would be like "oh, we remember this" . . . but I still changed it slightly to match the words used in track 15 of the HA score. I figured it could be slowed down the second time and the last note held longer for greater emotional tug. :roll: Or something like that. IDK, upon listening to this whole thing, it made sense to me to have it in there twice. These were just my thoughts while writing this silly thing. I blame the fact that's it's after 3 am and that I've had lots of coffee. Christmas lyrics in August CAN be done, but it IS tough. Hope these can be used / inspire you to write something better!-- Matt, who's one of those people who reads the boards almost every day but posts less than once every blue moon_______________________"My Bagel Was Airsick!" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PetePan 163 Posted August 26, 2002 Share Posted August 26, 2002 Ahhh together with my family...and with Santa around the christmas treeCan't wait till christmasPetePan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trumpeteer 302 Posted August 26, 2002 Share Posted August 26, 2002 Matt, let me tell you that I really enjoyed reading your lyrics. It flowed nicely...after I stopped tumbling over the melody.I think Ren will like it too.Oh Ren, where are youuuuuuuuuu?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted August 26, 2002 Author Share Posted August 26, 2002 excuse my french matt but,holy shit!i REALLY like it!How did you come up with that? Did it take along time? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted August 27, 2002 Author Share Posted August 27, 2002 warm fuzzy's inside me~~~ i can't wait for x-mas! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dalboz 0 Posted August 27, 2002 Share Posted August 27, 2002 :wink2: Thanks for the compliments guys. Glad to see others liked what I scribbed out.Ren, I wrote it off and on over the course of around 3 hours. Surfing the net, listening to both HA scores, and scribbling notes, themes, and rhymes. It all just kinda came together. I want it to be Chrismas now, too. 8O -- Matt, thinking that he now has HA score permanently stuck in his head for all eternity_______________________ "My Bagel Was Airsick!" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted August 27, 2002 Author Share Posted August 27, 2002 that is so awesome. THIS IS HOW GREAT THE MB IS!!!!I can't thank you enough. Do you want me to put your name in the program since you wrote so much? When my concert is over I'll be sure to get the sound up here for all to listen to. Ren Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Justin 2 Posted August 27, 2002 Share Posted August 27, 2002 Good work Dalboz!! excuse my french matt but, holy sh*t!:wow:You're not setting a very good example for the youngsters Ren. 8OJustin - jump1 beerchug Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trumpeteer 302 Posted August 27, 2002 Share Posted August 27, 2002 -- Matt, thinking that he now has HA score permanently stuck in his head for all eternity. And that'ssssssssssssssss bad? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted August 27, 2002 Author Share Posted August 27, 2002 Quote: excuse my french matt but, holy sh*t! You're not setting a very good example for the youngsters Ren. yes yes I know I may warp their fragile little minds (Cartman-esque). BUT come on this is the real world. We're talking JW here!!!! I'll try to calm myself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dalboz 0 Posted August 28, 2002 Share Posted August 28, 2002 Ren,you don't have to put my name in the program if you're low on space. It's not like anyone who reads it will know who I am anyways. Trumpeteer,I didn't mean it as a bad thing, necessarily, just that it was stuck in my head ALL the next day . . . and as much as I like it, it IS very Christmas-y . . . not exactly what I was looking for in August. -- Matt, descending back into "lurker" status_______________________ "Upstate New York? Where you are infested with Bagels and have no place to sleep?!?" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted August 29, 2002 Author Share Posted August 29, 2002 I have room to put you in and I'll send you a copy if you want. I want to give credit where credit is due! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted November 19, 2002 Author Share Posted November 19, 2002 I'll have you all know that my second graders can now sing ALL of the lyrics for Somewhere in My Mem'ry.Thank you to Leslie ( ) and Matthew DeTurck (I think that's how you spell it) AKA DalbozWhen I get a sound file of them I'll put it online if that's legal. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren 77 Posted November 19, 2002 Author Share Posted November 19, 2002 here's my program::::::Somewhere in My MemoryDecember 12, 2002 at 5:30 P. M.Miss McKinneyIntroductionCould We Have an Old Fashioned Holiday Jill Gallina*Up on the Housetop* Traditional Soloists are from Mrs. Small?s class. *Jolly Old St. Nicholas* Traditional Soloists are from Mrs. Hoffman?s class.Sleep Well, Little Children Lyrics by Alan Bergman Music by Leon Klatzkin*Santa Claus is Coming to Town* Lyrics by Haven Gillespie Soloists are from Mrs. Whicher?s class. Music by J. Fred Coots*All I Want for Christmas is My Two-Front Teeth* Don Gardner Soloists are from Mrs. Bousquet?s class.Trepak from The Nutcracker Choreography by Denise Gagne Music by Peter Illych Tchaikovsky*Silver Bells* Soloists are from Mrs. Stewarts?s class.*My Favorite Things* Lyrics by Oscar Hammerstein IISoloists are from Mrs. DeLuca?s class. Music by Richard RodgersSomewhere in My Mem?ry Lyrics by Leslie Bricusse Additional Lyrics By Matthew DeTurck Music by John WilliamsBlitzen?s Boogie Teresa and Paul Jennings Choreography by R. McKinney Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hlao-roo 389 Posted November 19, 2002 Share Posted November 19, 2002 I'll have you all know that my second graders can now sing ALL of the lyrics for Somewhere in My Mem'ry.Thank you to Leslie ( ) and Matthew DeTurck (I think that's how you spell it) AKA DalbozWhen I get a sound file of them I'll put it online if that's legal.Hey, this is cool! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted November 19, 2002 Share Posted November 19, 2002 Here's another Leslie Bricusse verse (you hear this on the Bette Midler version) :Memories of my childhood,When I was five, six or sevenI would wake when dawn wouldLiving in Christmas day heavenPrecious moments... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dalboz 0 Posted November 19, 2002 Share Posted November 19, 2002 (I think that's how you spell it)lol. Yep, that's correct. Good luck with the concert, Ren. -- Matt, itching to recieve his copy of the Home Alone 2 Deluxe Edition Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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